A.L : Was your audience and tone of voice in your essay the same in your model essay? How did your audience impact the way you wrote your paper, your tone and language.
You forgot to address some of the other aspects of writing we practiced and your experience with them(Brainstorming, Peer review, research and draft process). Mention what did you do during your drafting process and research process, how was it to get an interview? Easy? Difficult? How did you eventually find a way to synthesize your work even though it was hard? Lastly, did you learn anything new from august?