This is a great start. Content is strong. What this reflection could use are some examples from your won writing. For example, you say that you initially didn’t mimic the style of the model essay. Could you say something–give an example–of text you changed from first to final draft that shows how you moved closer to the style of the model? First I did this…then changed it to this. You could do that in a number of places. It’s your choice what you choose to expand, but the reflection should definitely include examples from your own essay.
Rhetoric and Social Justice
The City College of New York / Spring 2019 / Freshman Inquiry Writing Seminar Section HA2 / Instructors Caitlin Geoghan and Tom Peele
